Paper #3 Rewrite

I chose to completely rewrite my paper. I took some examples from the original but for the most part I started out on a fresh slate. After rereading my paper I realized that it was fairly unorganized. The format was choppy and the ideas were brought back up randomly. There was no flow.
I decided to begin the paper by focusing on persuasive blogging. I talked about the specific techniques for this medium. Then I transitioned into talking about the tactics that are used in traditional persuasive essays. I weaved in a few examples to strengthen my points. Finally, I discussed the challenges to blogging for a cause and the benefits of blogs vs traditional formats.
I discussed more specific strategies this time and narrowed the content of my paper. I varied my sentence openers and focused on improved fluency in order create a better flow.